Monday 11th March – Studio Support + My development
At first I wanted to print off my work and check overall the design to see if I was happy with it. The main thing I wanted to look at was the scale of the type, which I feel is just about right.
When talking to the tutor he had many suggestion on the page spreads. Straight away the tutor said that the type needs to start on the line. Also on the first spread there is a single sentence paragraph and he mentioned that this looks plain and as if its not meant to be there. Another type detail he looked at was on the last page spread where a single column is used, he said it didn’t work well with the other paragraphs and doesn’t read easily. To combat the type detailing, I started by rearranging the paragraphs so that they line up at the top and adjusted the last few paragraphs for the two column style used throughout. Then I looked at the single line paragraph and decided to simply make it bold to stand out and have its own presence.
We briefly mentioned the colours of the bubbles and I explained that the colours can represent fire as the memory is burnt away leaving distorted or even nothing behind. We both seemed very happy with this and I just looked over the opacity of some of the circles making each one fill the space with balance.
The next improvement he suggested was to look at the scale of the marginalia. This has been a topic of many of the feed backs I have got from both peers and tutors whether to scale up or down. Through looking back at some of the original designs with the hand written in a larger scale I feel now that the smaller and more subtle things work better. Also looking at the research they also used a lot of smaller styles so that it didn’t over power the design. When changing my design made them all smaller but each one still had a different scale to seem more hand written by more than just two people.
My tutor also mentioned the flow of the piece saying the although each page is good on their own the look very similar so it doesn’t progress enough. When looking through the sheets even I got confused to what one was the 2nd and which one was the 3rd. This meant I had to rethink parts of the design. One simple suggestion was to change the headings on each page as this would not be a repetition of the first title. Another suggestion was to play around more with the scale of the bubbles. This should increase the sense of curiosity of the reader as they flip each page.
To correct the flow I first removed then added new headings to the second and third pages. I found it hard to pull out a quote as I didn’t want to repeat any of the quotes used in the marginalia. Through looking back at my printed, note filled article I found some great snippets. When placing them I wanted to keep them in the same distorted style of the first page, with the breaking up of the words through new lines.

Next I thought about the positioning of the bubbles and with the sketches and ruff ideas the tutor gave I was able to be more experimental. I knew I wanted to keep the first spread very much the same but the progression needed to be big and powerful. So I started on the second design making certain bubbles bigger and changing the opacity of some of the smaller ones. The final spread I found this a lot harder to try do more experimenting with and be creative so to overcome this I took off about half of the circles. When placing them back I made sure they had a greater presence.Â